Re-write of chapter 1 smutfic

I redid some of the dialogue for chapter 1. captainecchi had been critical of the dialogue. I agree that the dialogue wasn't perhaps the way the charactars would talk and it didn't seem to flow smoothly for me. I think I tried to make it sound too I'm not sure what. Perhaps too fancy, or eleaborate, or sound better? So hopefully this works. Any feedback or criticism is appreciated (pretty pretty please). I want to get this chapter posted to adultfanfiction.net.

( And Police Girl Makes 3: Chapter 1 - Integral's Proposal )

Battle Royale

I finally got Battle Royale from Greencine this weekend. I must say that I absolutely loved it. I tend to like the weird/violent/macabre Japanese movies This movie was just so different then what I thought it'd be: yes it was very violent but there was also some really sweet moments and the whole film had so much to say about humanity. I think I like it as much as Audition or Happiness of the Katakuris.

Since I'm a Hellsing geek, I would love to think how I can do a Hellsing crossover fanfic based on the idea. Let me see - Millenium puts Hellsing & Iscariott members on an island and only one person can surrvive. Mmmmmm...I think I may just write it. Of course it would be very very dark and would contain no smut. But, maybe that is a good thing.